beyond the mask

well... i didn't like the writing, and it has no rhyming at all... =\ but i really liked the idea of the song, and i think that if you check ...

emm... for your first (?) song, it's pretty good one :] although it seemed to be compelled as you were writing (sorry for the language, my english isn't very good ...

scribblinquil: tnx a lot for the reply : ]] i'm glad if you've understood what i meant (although i'm quit not sure by myself waht is the point of my ...

i like the idea of this poem. but not the way it's been written... you know, i've been through many things in my life (although i'm only 16), believe me... ...

emmm...i didn't really like it... :S i think you could wrote it better, or at least develop it's meaning, because the basic idea of the song is really beautiful and ...

i liked it, it's very cute and meaningful...you actually can "feel" what you've felt when you wrote it... emm... "It is I alone" isn't it supposed to be "me" instead ...

hi again :D well, this is my new 25th actually ^_^ i hope you will like it : ] The play called "Our Life" Forget what you've heard now, Forget ...

well this poem is well written and actually it makes you to stop and think how you treat people surround you...this is good one. i liked everything about it except ...

if we talk about the poem itself, don't take it personally,but i didn't see anything new in it... i mean, the words that you've used here aren't new to me ...

the start is a little bit weird and "Crying" shouldn't be written with a capital letter, and it has no rhymes so...it's really akward. i liked the last part: "But ...

O_O i reaaaaally liked it!!! what was the inspiration for?! has a problem with rhyming so it's a little bit difficult to read it >

i liked your choice of the words and how you've put them together : ] but i think you could do it a little bit better. you know, there is ...

i'll be waiting for it : ]]

it's reallly cute and all but i didn't really like it... don't take it persinaly but it seems to me that you just have taken words and made them rhyme ...

it's a very good poem, well written too i loooved the last lines, they were a-w-s-o-m-e-! shabat shalom ^_^ have a great weekend